The ugly American & the ugly Sarkhanese
Homer Atkins: Homer was an intelligent man, he was very creative and smart. He always had a new good idea for everything, with a peace of paper and a pencil he could create great things. Homer is an ugly man, is married with Emma. First, he start being a sad man 'cause he couldn't express those ideas, he felt locked somehow, until the ambassador give's him a new homework. Homer had to create pump's 'cause people needed water and the way they was getting it was very difficult. So Homer created pump's, it was not too easy for him, he needed to create pump's without buying things so his wife, Emma, helped Homer, she told him to use bicycles, old bicycles. That's was a great idea, but he needed some smart people to work with him, that's when he met Jeepo. First, pumps was not working so Jeepo's had a great new idea, and this way they make the machine work. While they was creating this machine, Jeepo and Homer passed a lot of emotions they felt sad 'cause the machine was not working, they felt stressed because they needed a new way to make the machine work's but they didn't had any useful idea, then they finally make the machine work's so they felt happy, so happy and joyful.
Emma Atkins: She was ugly like her husband. She was very creative too, she loved to watch people and things, and create but she was not like Homer, she preferred to decorate her house and clean and cook, she was an woman's house. Homer and Emma loved each other, so.. she was always with Homer trying to help in anything she could. First she was worried about Homer's project but then she knew that he was so smart that in any moment he would find the way to make the machine work, she felt proud all the time 'cause she knew Homer could make it, so he did and she helped him cooking to the people that was working on that project with her husband, she and other woman.
The mand and the others: This people don't use to trust in others, they are way too different. At first they did not believed in Homer, they thought that he could never make it and Jeepo's was going to work so much more than Homer but they were wrong; The man thought that the plan would not work but it did, so he and the others started to trust more in Homer.. and when they saw that Jepoo's trusted in him they did too.
Jeepo: Jeepo is a Sarkhanese boy, he is ugly like Homer, but he is strong and smart too. Jeepo helped so much to Homer, in fact Jeepo was who ended the plan and make it work better and cheaper. From the first moment Jeepo and Homer liked each other, they knew that they were good people with good intentions. Jeepo felt worried and a little sad, he was sure that the people were not going to use this machine, because they used to make things in a simply way they would see this machine like something they were not prepared to use.. so Jeepo make that machine more simple. He and Homer were a great team, that's why the machine finally worked. With that plan done, he felt so happy too.
Your descriptions fit the characters.
ResponderBorrarAvoid contractions in writing.
Revise the use of the apostrophe: he needed to create pump's without buying things .